A Sister of Mercy (Rev. 2)

[TranquillityBase]

I like this, there's a sweetness to it and who can't relate to meeting someone briefly, having a connection, and then having to move on. I have one complaint:

On the last night 
we lay next to each other in the night,

Since there isn't a musical device at play here, I'd consider revising it so that you aren't repeating that word. Maybe "we lay next to each other in the dark" or something else.

(I want to come clean that I am getting my doctorate and I notice that sometimes I latch on the same empty academic word and come out with a phrase like: "the framework provides a framework" so I'm really sensitive to this issue.)

Good catch!  That's what I get for not reading it aloud as part of the editing process.