Make and Believe (rev.)

[TranquillityBase]

Hello Tranquil, this was a nice one. It's very different from the way that I write, so I find it difficult to make suggestions for improvement, but hopefully my thoughts are useful to you.

Wjames,

Thanks for the read and the notes.  I've revised it (well, the second stanza mostly) pretty extensively, to try to zero in on the words that fit whatever it is I am trying to say, taking into account what you and Rowens have said.  I don't think I've solved this one yet, as to meaning.

TqB