holes

[Wjames]

holes

who am I to wonder why
and wave good bye
or where it is I’m going to?  

something feels familiar
about some things I do
but most of all I wonder

who are you? 

darling, I’m your man
please sit and hold my hand
I'll do what I can
but you won't remember would this line be better as 'to show you'?

who I am

holes big as tomorrow
have begun to open up
the holes of yesterday
all closing down 

I will still be here
holding you, my dear 
but there will be nobody
that you know around The punctuation threw me a bit at first read (mainly between lines 2 and 3 of this stanza) - was a bit awkward to read naturally at first.

darling, I’m your man
please sit and hold my hand
I know who you are-
what we did, and I still do- Would this line be improved without 'I'? It would still have the same meaning as knowing what we did to one read, but would add another meaning as well about the present.

It's OK to ask me
who are you?

Hey Mark, I like this one, it's got a lot of feeling and like Tranquil said is very musical (I could easily imagine a melody around some sections and the poem being lyrics).

I also agree with 'holes' maybe not being the right word - unfortunately to my monkey brain the first thing that I think of when I hear the word holes is sexual organs (my porn addiction is showing here - although I think I'm probably in the majority).