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[galaxitchi]

So, I’m trying to learn meter. It’s confusing, but I had the idea to listen to a song and try to write with it..I’m not really sure if that’s like..ethical or what..sooo

nail your flyers for bloodshot buyers
blue ribbon bait for all latent liars
timeless stakes kill the ego games
clear stadiums of sin and shame

play the truth again, it’s printed in my skin
drawn by the architect, living in my flesh            my favorite lines
my simple wish for you, that you’ll win it too
a treasure so complete, it competes for you.

It's honorable of you to study meter.  It's an element of poetry I've always ignored as it seems to add a mechanical requirement that seems artificial to me.  And all my favorite poets (with one notable exception) are free verse writers.  But I admire writers who are able to incorpoate it into their poems.  Definitely, it adds music to the poem.

Anyway, as to your poem, it does seem like the rhyming is determining to some extent what you've written.

As Mark said, it's probably essential that you read your poem aloud and use that simple step to sound it out and see if it sounds right, reads smoothly.  Though I confess, it's not something I do as routinely as I should.

TqB

Oh, that’s interesting! I think I also prefer free verse. Yea, I see it now, how I was less writing a poem and more making rhymes, lol. I’d like to learn meter, but I could see myself doing the same thing maybe..awkwardly trying to make things fit..hm, I wonder, if you could just drill basic meters into your head, that it would kind of flow naturally in a meter, or close to it..