05-19-2023, 06:01 AM
You, Bunx, can get away with a poem like this.
You can put it in an album sleeve.
As for the critique:
Your lines all always stronger before the rhymed next one.
"Dancing in a scenery of lessons" is the kind of line that makes poems.
Don't give in to the bouncing need to rhyme.
I know why you do it, here. You do it like a shrug.
Well, this, well tis.
You know?
You can put it in an album sleeve.
As for the critique:
Your lines all always stronger before the rhymed next one.
"Dancing in a scenery of lessons" is the kind of line that makes poems.
Don't give in to the bouncing need to rhyme.
I know why you do it, here. You do it like a shrug.
Well, this, well tis.
You know?