05-17-2023, 04:56 AM
Hi busker-
In the desert
At night, the days
return, like waves interestingly quizical opening
on the sea 'on the sea of Time' seems a bit worn
of Time, friendless companion. the poem seems to be built on the two bolded rhymes, and they're good ones.
At night, you are
close to me. Immutable,
like a cycling star - not sure 'cycling' is the right word
a cloud to cloud really good from here to the end
and grave to grave
eternity,
my endless companion.
In the desert
At night, the days
return, like waves interestingly quizical opening
on the sea 'on the sea of Time' seems a bit worn
of Time, friendless companion. the poem seems to be built on the two bolded rhymes, and they're good ones.
At night, you are
close to me. Immutable,
like a cycling star - not sure 'cycling' is the right word
a cloud to cloud really good from here to the end
and grave to grave
eternity,
my endless companion.

