Talisman(edit)

Talisman(edit)

galaxitchi Offline

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05-15-2023, 10:24 PM

I really like your structure, where the line breaks are at. I felt this lovely, poetic tension as I was eager for the next line! I’m a complete amateur, but if I have to pick something to improve, I feel like the second stanza, could have something worked on.

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Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-14-2023, 12:52 PM

RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-14-2023, 09:48 PM

RE: Talismans - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 05:02 AM

RE: Talismans - by TranquillityBase - 05-15-2023, 06:31 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by Poetry In Motion - 05-15-2023, 11:46 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-15-2023, 10:24 PM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-15-2023, 11:38 PM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by galaxitchi - 05-16-2023, 01:52 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 05-16-2023, 07:14 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by TranquillityBase - 05-16-2023, 01:53 AM

RE: Talisman(edit) - by busker - 05-16-2023, 08:59 AM

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