05-05-2023, 07:30 AM
(05-05-2023, 06:36 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote: I think it works either way but better to keep the tone consistent. Either be conversation throughout or terse. But if you prefer a looser style it can still be tightened, I think. That’s what my gut tells me. I’m no expert!I tightened it more and excised "that free". Read your comment and reread the poem and saw immmediately it should go.
Not looking for experts, just honest reaction. Thanks for the secondary read and critique.