04-30-2023, 01:58 AM
(04-30-2023, 01:40 AM)Jay_Alexander Wrote: We are more than the summationI like what you say, but have some reservations on how you put it on the page, as you can see. But you've got some good verse there. Next time pit it in one of the critique threads.
of rules and regulations
Expectations
beyond prayers to deliver line break here
With her
she gives altercations
of jubilation
digits grasped
past
correlation of adulation another line break
when we congress
Digress the excess
holy hums
tacit quivers
divine perspiration
spirit distillation at this point you begin to lose me, Rhythym is lost, it just becomes a list.
A configuration Back on track, from here on out, for me.
of humanity
spirituality
ethereal delirium
comfortable insanity
imperial madness
Past this
all consuming
eluding veil
of the frail
Confer in dens
look past the lens
set your mind
free from
Rules and regulations
expectation
Find jubilation
in your darkest incarnations
That is your summation
Do you lay when you fall
or answer the call?
This is miscellaneous which is not really a critique thread, but I figured if you put something out here, you want a reaction.
TqB

