04-30-2023, 01:26 AM
Wonderful witty little poem!
The gall of man to try and conquer that which he knows is unattainable, yet at the same time the cathartic surrender to the moment.
I'm am whisked away with you as we soar into the sky, without a care in the world.
Then as suddenly as it started, you chide us for thinking we could ever compete with the birds.
Reading your poem, I can't help but be reminded of the myth of Icarus, and smile a bit.
Just a small note; personally I would get rid of the comma and periods. It takes away from the flow of the poem and power of each line.
An absolutely delicious read.
Thank you!
The gall of man to try and conquer that which he knows is unattainable, yet at the same time the cathartic surrender to the moment.
I'm am whisked away with you as we soar into the sky, without a care in the world.
Then as suddenly as it started, you chide us for thinking we could ever compete with the birds.
Reading your poem, I can't help but be reminded of the myth of Icarus, and smile a bit.
Just a small note; personally I would get rid of the comma and periods. It takes away from the flow of the poem and power of each line.
An absolutely delicious read.
Thank you!
v/r,
Jay
Jay