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04-01-2023, 04:12 AM
(04-01-2023, 12:51 AM)TranquillityBase Wrote: Should I maybe end on a high note, e.g. "shadow and light"?Absolutely Tim- I see that the most recent has been posted. You smoothed it into a gem of a poem. I'm proud of you brother. Great job! ... Mark ps. Sorry to have to suggest two minor tweaks: ‘ skull’s mirrors’ since I presume it’s not one mirror to produce the kaleidoscope effect. An em dash before ‘this skull’ in the penultimate line. |
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Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-22-2023, 11:02 PM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-23-2023, 01:51 AM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-24-2023, 05:58 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-24-2023, 07:06 AM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-25-2023, 01:40 AM
RE: Memento - by alonso ramoran - 03-25-2023, 02:12 AM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-25-2023, 06:32 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-25-2023, 10:46 PM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-27-2023, 07:58 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-27-2023, 10:29 AM
RE: Memento - by brynmawr1 - 03-28-2023, 11:52 AM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-30-2023, 10:31 AM
RE: Memento - by alonso ramoran - 03-30-2023, 04:13 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-30-2023, 11:11 AM
RE: Memento - by brynmawr1 - 03-30-2023, 11:50 AM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 03-31-2023, 01:35 AM
RE: Memento - by alonso ramoran - 03-30-2023, 02:27 PM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-30-2023, 11:52 PM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 03-31-2023, 10:00 PM
RE: Memento - by TranquillityBase - 04-01-2023, 12:51 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 04-01-2023, 04:12 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 04-02-2023, 02:40 AM
RE: Memento - by Mark A Becker - 04-25-2023, 10:51 PM
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