April Takes a Walk

[brynmawr1]

Hello again, Steve,
Going for ‘a big idea’ would very likely ruin this lovely little poem.  I do not want to be prompted toward a grand metaphor. I very much appreciate this poem for its simplicity. Please don’t mess it up. It’s like a series of still paintings that I can picture.  I felt like I was along on the walk, and that is all this poem needs to do for me.
The line about what he has to offer should just be replaced with a line that fits better.
Write another one to fulfill that metaphorical urge, but don’t obscure this one with metaphorical paint.
That said, it is your poem…

Hello again Mark,
Well I wasn't thinking of making big changes.  Little tweaks of language that make the reader stop and think that maybe there is a little more here.  But that will require some thought and time.  Someone once told me they like to put their work away trusting that future them will be a better poet than present them.  I enjoy revisiting old poems from time to time to see what else I might get from them.  In the meantime, I have adopted your suggestions. Thanks.
steve