03-15-2023, 07:57 AM
The revised version is a well written little poem. Perhaps needing some more editing (I should…empathetic). The cardinal singing remains an enigma.
All very well. But quite forgettable. It’s like many other poems on the topic.
The original was original. It was brilliant. The cardinal’s singing was a fit ending.
The reference to Louise gave it immediacy.
It was perfect in my book.
All very well. But quite forgettable. It’s like many other poems on the topic.
The original was original. It was brilliant. The cardinal’s singing was a fit ending.
The reference to Louise gave it immediacy.
It was perfect in my book.