03-08-2023, 08:23 AM
(02-09-2023, 06:15 AM)Semicircle Wrote: String lightsI like what you're saying here and how you're saying it. I'm a bit unsure how you are using "screens"....lot of different meanings, some of which clash with your title.
Look hard enough and see
what you thought were stars
are really screens
dangling from cords that
unravel with the sky.
and now you're aware
a new star shines.
Also, the last line loses some of its punch since you've already used "stars" as an image at the beginning.
TqB

