Raging in my mind
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(03-02-2023, 02:10 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote:  
(02-25-2023, 05:33 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  In My Mind

An anxious wind yowls
unsure in its direction
certain of its fury.
'yowls' is the correct word

In the spirit of the form (no titles), you could easily rearrange this one to include the title:


? ? in my mind  You just need a 2 syllable word here- I would suggest one, but it's not my poem.
unsure in its direction
an anxious wind yowls  This should be the penultimate line.           Do you mean ultimate line? Otherwise, needs two more syllables, as well.
Hmmmmm.... Dodgy
Easily is a subjective word!
'drive you coo-coo' indeed.
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Messages In This Thread
Raging in my mind - by brynmawr1 - 02-25-2023, 05:33 AM
RE: Outside - by TranquillityBase - 02-25-2023, 07:02 AM
RE: Outside - by brynmawr1 - 02-26-2023, 12:47 PM
RE: Outside - by Mark A Becker - 02-27-2023, 07:48 AM
RE: Outside - by brynmawr1 - 02-27-2023, 09:05 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit) - by Mark A Becker - 02-28-2023, 02:07 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 03-01-2023, 05:00 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by TranquillityBase - 03-01-2023, 05:14 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 02:10 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 05:14 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 05:51 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 06:05 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 07:12 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 07:41 AM



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