Raging in my mind
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(02-25-2023, 05:33 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  In My Mind

An anxious wind scurries
unsure in its direction
certain of its fury.
Hey Steve-
The title change is good, as it reinforces the anxious wind/mind metaphor.

I don't think 'scurries' is the word you're looking for.  There are planty of other verbs to show how the wind might act.

You are closer to a solution.

Patience,
Mark
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Messages In This Thread
Raging in my mind - by brynmawr1 - 02-25-2023, 05:33 AM
RE: Outside - by TranquillityBase - 02-25-2023, 07:02 AM
RE: Outside - by brynmawr1 - 02-26-2023, 12:47 PM
RE: Outside - by Mark A Becker - 02-27-2023, 07:48 AM
RE: Outside - by brynmawr1 - 02-27-2023, 09:05 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit) - by Mark A Becker - 02-28-2023, 02:07 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit) - by brynmawr1 - 03-01-2023, 05:00 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by TranquillityBase - 03-01-2023, 05:14 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 02:10 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 05:14 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 05:51 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 06:05 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by Mark A Becker - 03-02-2023, 07:12 AM
RE: In My Mind(edit2) - by brynmawr1 - 03-02-2023, 07:41 AM



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