02-24-2023, 01:25 PM
Maybe if you pared back all the adjectives, something like the below, as a starting point:
Strange boats
with crooked wooden crosses
loom over the shore.
Small boats
cut through morning mist,
closing in
from the breakers,
Oddly dressed men
carrying colorful banners
reach dry land and kneel
in the sand, with arms upraised.
They meet us with eyes
full of wonder, and hands
full of steel.
The last 3 lines are great. It’s coming together
Strange boats
with crooked wooden crosses
loom over the shore.
Small boats
cut through morning mist,
closing in
from the breakers,
Oddly dressed men
carrying colorful banners
reach dry land and kneel
in the sand, with arms upraised.
They meet us with eyes
full of wonder, and hands
full of steel.
The last 3 lines are great. It’s coming together