02-23-2023, 02:19 AM
Hello Namyh-
I don't think the bold font adds anything, and reads like you are shouting.
Below, I've plucked out some of the phrases that resonated with me:
All that said, this one works within the FUN FORUM,
Mark
I don't think the bold font adds anything, and reads like you are shouting.
Below, I've plucked out some of the phrases that resonated with me:
(02-10-2023, 08:11 AM)Namyh Wrote: sculpts with wordsThere is some interesting internal rhyming, though some of it seems a tad forced. Being a fan of saying more with less, I believe that you could compress this one to avoid being redundant.
foxhole words
no wind to make a flag of words unfurl
jewels within a chest
All that said, this one works within the FUN FORUM,
Mark

