02-09-2023, 03:54 AM
Hi Tim-
The things that go through our minds as we grow older... I've had a few unusual dreams myself lately- past people and events mingling together in odd ways.
The Lost Tribe
I remember you all
Loris, editor and poet, a bear of a man,
Regie, queen of a love hard as diamond,
Paul, Vietnam Vet, playwright on a goof,
Margaret, sad madonna, love-sick,
who I dreamt about last night: good introduction of characters
the Library was like night,
we were kissing,
it was the mid 70s again.
I was so goddamned young. interesting sudden turn into a dream
So I woke and listened to Patti Smith, minor change
tracing your faces, hearing again your voices, minor change
replaying the moments that tied us together another minor change
or tore us apart in soon irrelevant anger , other minor changes (struck 'soon' added comma)
resurrecting the anguish and glory maybe 'resurrected' (ties back to listened)
of that tribe, vanished in time. maybe 'our' Not sure about this ending Tim. 'vanished in time' just seems out of place after you've just related some details that speak otherwise: the past hasn't really vanished, although the people may have. Maybe 'vanishing with time' ??? I think the 'vanishing' is happening in the present. Maybe a word other than 'vanish' ??? 'now scattered, like dust' ??? I dunno...
The things that go through our minds as we grow older... I've had a few unusual dreams myself lately- past people and events mingling together in odd ways.
The Lost Tribe
I remember you all
Loris, editor and poet, a bear of a man,
Regie, queen of a love hard as diamond,
Paul, Vietnam Vet, playwright on a goof,
Margaret, sad madonna, love-sick,
who I dreamt about last night: good introduction of characters
the Library was like night,
we were kissing,
it was the mid 70s again.
I was so goddamned young. interesting sudden turn into a dream
So I woke and listened to Patti Smith, minor change
tracing your faces, hearing again your voices, minor change
replaying the moments that tied us together another minor change
or tore us apart in soon irrelevant anger , other minor changes (struck 'soon' added comma)
resurrecting the anguish and glory maybe 'resurrected' (ties back to listened)
of that tribe, vanished in time. maybe 'our' Not sure about this ending Tim. 'vanished in time' just seems out of place after you've just related some details that speak otherwise: the past hasn't really vanished, although the people may have. Maybe 'vanishing with time' ??? I think the 'vanishing' is happening in the present. Maybe a word other than 'vanish' ??? 'now scattered, like dust' ??? I dunno...