The New Paranoia

[brynmawr1]

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The emails I’ve been receiving
lately are so disturbing to me:

strangers asking me
about the size of my penis,
my stamina,

wondering
about my lady,
if she is satisfied.          is she satisfied.

Who are these
people?
                                            I think you could cut these.  The questions are implicit in the next stanza
How are they
privy to these things?

And where were they
that first time I was alone
with Sherri Longfellow
when I went home out of breath
and she was witness
to all those stains
of embarrassment?


Edit #1

Certain emails I’ve been receiving
lately disturb me.

Strangers ask about the size
of my penis, my stamina,
wondering about my lady,
if she is satisfied.

Who are these people
and how do they know
these things?

Where were they the first time
I was alone with Sherri Longfellow
when I went home breathless
and she was witness to all
those embarrassing stains?

Hi 71

I enjoyed this.  Made a few suggestions.
Thanks for sharing
Bryn