Seasons Along the Potomac

[Tiger the Lion]

[quote="Mark A Becker" pid='262746' dateline='1672671944']
Pretty much gorgeous, Mark.  I think a more specific title, like Virginia Seasons (or wherever), would prepre the reader better for what's coming.

Yes Tim,

I have changed the title to better reflect a sense of place, and changed the order to winter-spring-summer-fall.

Also changed "clear" to "the", as that adjective kept tripping up the rhythm.  'Clear' also seemed redundant with the last line.  Changed 'skies' to the singular 'sky' because the plural just didn't seem right. I think that 'sky' works better with 'cool blue...' (implying a single sheet of music/sky).   

While it may not matter to anybody but me, tinkering is one of my favorite hobbies, as you can see.

Didn't do the 'Previous Versions' tag as the first version is shown in the comment by you.

I think I prefer the original order. The transition from razor wire to blossoms is too jarring. Although it might work with spring as the last section. Still jarring, but with a hopeful end. Enjoy your tinkering.