Draft 2: Day Off

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Interesting that it reminds you of Haruki Murakami. I've actually been reading The Wind-Up Bird Chronicles so that should explain it. As for the ending, I don't really know how else to end it that still gets across the same message. I'm open to suggestions and in the meantime I'll try to think of alternatives.

Thank you,
Alex

Rereading it, I think what bothered me was "poem of cliches", particularly the "of cliches".  It diminishes the sentiment and adds a sense of disappointment that I don't think belongs.  

What about:
......................................a poem,
never finished,...........................

?