December Evening (new title)
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I think it might be better with “dusk breeze” as the title that doubles up as the first line, indirectly, and the poem formally starting at “leaves”

Also “a remnant” sounds verbose. “Some”? “Or”? “A few”?
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RE: Autumn Hallucination - by busker - 12-13-2022, 09:25 PM
RE: Autumn Hallucination - by TranquillityBase - 12-13-2022, 09:55 PM
RE: Autumn Hallucination - by brynmawr1 - 12-14-2022, 03:25 AM
RE: Autumn Hallucination - by TranquillityBase - 12-14-2022, 03:33 AM
RE: Autumn Hallucination - by brynmawr1 - 12-14-2022, 04:48 AM



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