Against False Dichotomies, v2

[brynmawr1]

v2

yeah I don't really like that ending either. I tried my hand at making it clearer, like

whatever choice she makes,
she is already damned.
Those who damn her further
only damn themselves.

but I find it too, idk, didactic? proverbial? obvious?

Hi Rivernotch,

I have two suggestions that might help.  The first is to shorten the first part describing the conditions.  To my ear, the specifics of each aren't needed to set up the situation you examine in the second half.  Then expand the ideas behind what puts these women in this situation of being forced to carry these doomed fetuses to term only to watch them die eg that these conditions aren't diagnosed until mid pregnancy and the false elevation and politicization of that issue for cynical politics.  Finally, I don't think the title helps though I see where you are going.  The other theme that just occurred to me, and what you might be referring to, is the idea of religious freedom and how one side cries foul and then uses laws to forces their beliefs on others.
Good luck
Bryn