Against False Dichotomies, v2

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v2



yeah I don't really like that ending either. I tried my hand at making it clearer, like



whatever choice she makes,

she is already damned.

Those who damn her further

only damn themselves.



but I find it too, idk, didactic? proverbial? obvious?

I think the first stanzas (1-3) are didactic.  If you could condense those, or find a way to dispense with them, and get right to Anencephaly, I think it would improve the poem.

I like the first two lines of the proposed ending, so what about something like:

if all this was brought about
by our sinful nature, then
whatever choice she makes
she is already damned.

Then perhaps another stanza, about those who would condemn/propagandize her?


what use have we for your
misguided condemnation?        gratuitous, redundant?

and two more lines, somehow summing up? a final statement about false dichotomies?