11-10-2022, 10:53 PM
Hi Trevor,
Good to see you back. I'm the last person who should critique a Christmas poem, not having much Christmas spirit now or ever. So I'm going to just make one suggestion. It seems to me you've made your point about Santa in the first two stanzas. I think stanza 3 could be dropped so you can get quickly to the point of your secret Santa.
I wish Knot were still around. This is right up his alley.
This link may or may not take you to a list of his poems (never tried to do this before):
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/search.php?action=results&sid=eb0acb437beac00cbb1a670872ce575a
Not sure if he ever did a Christmas poem.
Tim
Good to see you back. I'm the last person who should critique a Christmas poem, not having much Christmas spirit now or ever. So I'm going to just make one suggestion. It seems to me you've made your point about Santa in the first two stanzas. I think stanza 3 could be dropped so you can get quickly to the point of your secret Santa.
I wish Knot were still around. This is right up his alley.
This link may or may not take you to a list of his poems (never tried to do this before):
http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/search.php?action=results&sid=eb0acb437beac00cbb1a670872ce575a
Not sure if he ever did a Christmas poem.
Tim