Grave digga
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(11-05-2022, 06:11 AM)Semicircle Wrote:  Words are ain’t worth their weight in dirt

Action is worth its weight in words  (but words are weightless- maybe “worth its weight in work”)

Keep shoveling up the earth

Show your money's worth
Hi slicer-
The first two lines ate pretty good, but the last two are a bit of a let down.
Not sure what to suggest, but I think going for the rhyme doesn’t help.
Mark
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Grave digga - by Semicircle - 11-05-2022, 06:11 AM
RE: Grave digga - by Mark A Becker - 11-06-2022, 11:56 AM
RE: Grave digga - by Semicircle - 11-08-2022, 07:17 AM



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