Row 6

[TrevorConway]

Hi all,

Thanks very much for the feedback on this, as well as the welcome. It seems pretty clear about the last verse needing to go. On another forum, lots of commenters seemed to find that the basic approach (my motivation for the poem) of having the speaker speculate on another's thoughts simply didn't work/wasn't plausible in some way. Do ye agree, or is it an acceptable angle (even if viewed as a conceit or a device) into the poem?

Thanks,

Trevor