Chivalry

[Tiger the Lion]

Chivalry

"May I?" she asked
as she walked up to the picnic table
with her lunch bag and drink.
"Sure."

She seemed pleasant enough
until a bee landed near my hand.
Suddendly she shouted, "KILL IT!"
"Why?'"
"Because I'm afraid of it!"
"So, you kill it."
"But you're the man."
"And it's just a little bee."
"Please," she implored,
offering helpless doe eyes.
"I'm still not killing it."
She jumped up to leave
saying, "some man you are."
I didn't reply
as she walked away
with that bee
on the straw of her drink.

As she disappeared
around the corner
I couldn't help but chuckle
when I heard her shrieks of terror.

I know we're in "Fun" but I wanted to offer up my first instinct. I think in L3 you miss a great opportunity for detail that would build a character. Instead of "her lunch bag and drink" ...

her chili fries and Slurpee

her sushi and smoothie


-- your own details, of course, but it just jumped out at me as a great spot to tighten the poem a a whole.