box office
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(10-19-2022, 11:30 AM)Miley Wrote:  beyond glass
businessmen’s great geometry
i can eat  polished shoes  down
the sidewalk  dark
clot of blankets
could be a body
is a body
could be alive
could be
I agree with CRNDLSM about the spacing; exaggerate that a bit more.  I had the same feeling of being on the street, outside a movie house, old style with the glassed in box office, late at night.  Didn't make a connection to the homeless, but that's because I've not been in such an atmosphere in many a year.

"I can eat   polished shoes   down
the sidewalk   dark"                          is the heart of the poem for me.

I like it too.
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Messages In This Thread
box office - by Miley - 10-19-2022, 11:30 AM
RE: box office - by CRNDLSM - 10-19-2022, 08:32 PM
RE: box office - by TranquillityBase - 10-19-2022, 09:56 PM
RE: box office - by Miley - 10-22-2022, 03:46 AM
RE: box office - by Mark A Becker - 10-26-2022, 04:13 AM
RE: box office - by TrevorConway - 10-31-2022, 04:56 AM



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