10-18-2022, 10:47 PM
(10-15-2022, 07:51 PM)EAGLES 28 Wrote: music is to the mind what earth is to flowers
what you might find in a Prill showers do you mean April? anyway, April showers is a little cliche, maybe Spring showers?
each bud springing from the earth a new flower
the trees and branches in discordant harmony I'm of two minds about this. I guess you can have "discordant harmony", but it also verges on cancelling itself out as a phrase
to the predestined mind
as your soul unwind these last two lines are what make the poem for me, but it should be "unwinds"; it doesn't have to be a perfect rhyme to work