10-16-2022, 03:54 AM
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Please do not ever think
that if you abuse and victimize
men who look like the men
who once victimized and abused
men who looked like you–
that this worm will turn only once
that righteous wrath is yours alone
that downtrodden people
never will rise up and take revenge
when it’s you that did the treading.
Please do not ever think
you can’t be better
only just as bad–
because the wheel of justice
will not stop
with you on top.
@Tiger - Taking your idea a bit further. Always hard to guide the reader's phrasing without becoming dictatorial about it. No word changes, thought about "that this worm will turn but once" but too literary/archaic for a flat delivery.
About the title - was originally "Think Twice," of course, but secondary consequences makes three. Thanks.
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Goodness! That other fellow was in and out so fast I didn't even catch his name! And with a good example of how to actually do a brief critique right there, that he could have followed.
Please do not ever think
that if you abuse and victimize
men who look like the men
who once victimized and abused
men who looked like you–
that this worm will turn only once
that righteous wrath is yours alone
that downtrodden people
never will rise up and take revenge
when it’s you that did the treading.
Please do not ever think
you can’t be better
only just as bad–
because the wheel of justice
will not stop
with you on top.
@Tiger - Taking your idea a bit further. Always hard to guide the reader's phrasing without becoming dictatorial about it. No word changes, thought about "that this worm will turn but once" but too literary/archaic for a flat delivery.
About the title - was originally "Think Twice," of course, but secondary consequences makes three. Thanks.
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Goodness! That other fellow was in and out so fast I didn't even catch his name! And with a good example of how to actually do a brief critique right there, that he could have followed.
Non-practicing atheist

