Systematic Sentimental
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(09-30-2022, 10:08 AM)Bunx Wrote:  Systematic Sentiment 

I feel ashamed.
Stability within survival,
Encouragement reflecting cliches.
Within a system built to prey.

I cannot change.                               I think you repeat this line too much.  Once at beginning and again at the end would suffice.

When you only know,
One route to safety.                         comma at end here, instead of a period
Things usually stay the same.
Complaint reliance, silent surroundings.

I cannot change.

Silent shackles that bind us.
Delusions from the rich
slithers and thrives.                    slither and thrive
As the forest tries to survive.

I cannot change.

Ashamed in myself,
for endless interpersonal grace.
Trying to be the most stable,
of the the insane.
Keeping this roof over my head.

I cannot change.

That I want to shout about,
Hypocritical policies, government for sale.
Innocent prisoners without bail.
Police, hunting the sick without fail.
I'm afraid.

I cannot change.
I like it.
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Messages In This Thread
Systematic Sentimental - by Bunx - 09-30-2022, 10:08 AM
RE: Systematic Sentimental - by TranquillityBase - 09-30-2022, 09:19 PM
RE: Systematic Sentimental - by dukealien - 10-05-2022, 06:12 AM
RE: Systematic Sentimental - by Bunx - 10-07-2022, 03:22 AM



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