Burst

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Break this shell, 
burst out triumphant 
like a bloated zit.                                 "bloated zit" is really just gross (to me) and doesn't fit in with the tone of the rest of the poem
May they wither under your roar            who are "they"?
or rise in arms to destroy,
flailing in the name of god.        Why not capitalize God?


Throttle the reins, ride into the sun,
scream out bleeding teeth,                    through?
bare the pain on your skin, absorb it,
and burst out triumphant

There's something almost Biblical about this poem, in an apocalyptic way.  I don't mean it's particularly Christian, but has the voice of some angry prophet.

TqB