09-24-2022, 11:24 AM
(09-18-2022, 07:45 AM)Semicircle Wrote:I have improved it, thanks for the critiques Duke and Base. I will keep the downer ending though, I think it resonates more than if it was just a simple question because of its accusatory tone.This is what you would becomehad I not shown the future.I’ll give you the choice–will you defy natureto further your own endsor will you bear responsibility?Either way, I can trust in youto make the wrong decision.
Also, I'm laughing Duke, that's a good one.

