09-22-2022, 09:36 AM
(This post was last modified: 09-22-2022, 09:41 AM by Tiger the Lion.)
(09-22-2022, 06:00 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: It's That Time of YearI always enjoy solstice/equinox poems. They come with so much inherent metaphor. We had a thread full of them a few years back. The last line reminds me a little of the last line from Bukowski's "Bluebird." (in a good way)
when light and dark will be equal
for a moment.
Colors may change,
but will you?
Consider a few tweaks for immediacy. (or not)
when light and dark are equal (maybe even equal(s)
Colors will change
Not really suggestions so much as angles worth thinking about.
Edit: http://www.pigpenpoetry.com/thread-16271...t=solstice

