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Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit)
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09-12-2022, 12:42 AM
Okay hear me out, the revision is good, I like the rhymes and the rhythm, I think you lost a little bit of your own style though to the stricter form. What if you were to blend the two drafts together, cut and paste, a little form a little chaos. Just an idea.
Peanut butter honey banana sandwiches
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Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit) - by TranquillityBase - 09-06-2022, 08:57 AM
RE: Be My Baby - by CRNDLSM - 09-08-2022, 07:23 AM
RE: Be My Baby - by Mark A Becker - 09-08-2022, 09:27 AM
RE: Be My Baby - by brynmawr1 - 09-08-2022, 08:23 AM
RE: Be My Baby - by Mark A Becker - 09-09-2022, 01:48 AM
RE: Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit) - by TranquillityBase - 09-11-2022, 11:25 PM
RE: Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit) - by Mark A Becker - 09-11-2022, 11:54 PM
RE: Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit) - by CRNDLSM - 09-12-2022, 12:42 AM
RE: Maybe Baby (Be My Baby-Edit) - by brynmawr1 - 09-12-2022, 05:04 AM
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