Island Song

[Mark A Becker]

I thought I oughta roll one out for the harvest moon. 

Thanks Steve,

If I move L.2 back to L.1 it might read smoother. I had it that way previously, but wanted to make it feel a bit more disjointed. Short ones like these make it very difficult to break the lines for intended effect. I obviously over-think these things.  I may go back to my original formatting, below:

Watch out how your shadow
dances
when a full moon
rises.

Calypso trips so many
fools,
strips off all
disguises.


Thanks Tim,
Couldn't resist the 'Calypso / trips so' rhyme. While I must admit that 'reveals' works well with the 'L' sounds, that 2 syllable word would screw up the rthymn.  I don't have a great solution.

Anywho,
Thanks for the comments guys