09-10-2022, 09:38 PM
(09-10-2022, 05:27 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: Island SongHi Mark,
Watch out
how your shadow
dances
when a full moon
rises.
Calypso
trips
so many fools,
strips off all
disguises.
Very nice. I don't have much to say except that I stumble a bit with L1 into L2 of the first stanza. I want to get rid of "out" but that removes the warning component of L1 so that leaves me wanting to change "how" to another word such as "lest".
Hope you have a good weekend,
steve