09-08-2022, 12:17 PM
Hm. as a woman, I think: "a woman's wanting" is part universal, part societal, part biological. You could say that for most of history, "a woman's wanting" has been an oxymoron. And now she wants flowers, but not really. what to do?
"She only offers lust when they are pretty and plucked" . many men could say this about women themselves. same for, "It seems she has little use for them once wilted". why can't a woman want and use something the same way men have always wanted and used women? is that misandry to say? coming from someone who holds women who won't take the trash out in high, high contempt. (I work in the restaurant industry.)
"she won't be the one who takes the garbage out" . Funny line upon first viewing, introspective afterwards. yes, the woman wants and apparently the woman gets. whose fault is that?
I like this poem. flowers as a symbol of your love. Because women are incapable of asking for more? -- or because men are incapable of giving more? -- or just personal incompatibility?
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as for actual crit, I don't have much. well-written. the line breaks in particular.
"She only offers lust when they are pretty and plucked" . many men could say this about women themselves. same for, "It seems she has little use for them once wilted". why can't a woman want and use something the same way men have always wanted and used women? is that misandry to say? coming from someone who holds women who won't take the trash out in high, high contempt. (I work in the restaurant industry.)
"she won't be the one who takes the garbage out" . Funny line upon first viewing, introspective afterwards. yes, the woman wants and apparently the woman gets. whose fault is that?
I like this poem. flowers as a symbol of your love. Because women are incapable of asking for more? -- or because men are incapable of giving more? -- or just personal incompatibility?
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as for actual crit, I don't have much. well-written. the line breaks in particular.