08-29-2022, 07:03 AM
Semi and Bryn,
Thanks for the reads and the suggestions. I'm not sure why I persisted in building rhyme into this one, except it started out with a rhyme and I decided to persist. I actually don't care that much for rhyme, except in nursery rhymes and nonsense poems. I tinkered with this one for weeks and most of that time was spent trying to come up with the rhymes and I found that a real distraction. I'm just not a rhyming poet, I think.
But you both made valuable observations about the content. I'm thinking, if it has a second life, I'll just strip out most of the rhyme and write in my more native voice.
Thanks again for taking the time to comment.
TqB
Thanks for the reads and the suggestions. I'm not sure why I persisted in building rhyme into this one, except it started out with a rhyme and I decided to persist. I actually don't care that much for rhyme, except in nursery rhymes and nonsense poems. I tinkered with this one for weeks and most of that time was spent trying to come up with the rhymes and I found that a real distraction. I'm just not a rhyming poet, I think.
But you both made valuable observations about the content. I'm thinking, if it has a second life, I'll just strip out most of the rhyme and write in my more native voice.
Thanks again for taking the time to comment.
TqB