She's going out

[CRNDLSM]

You wipe lipstick
from your teeth
with a finger toothbrush, vivid, it's gross to me, makes it more vivid.
I watch ash confetti
fall slowly in to the hearth, 
snow flakes on a coal fire. The snow is ash?

You lean forward
to slide on a red shoe tthis reminds me of a slow panning camera, a drawn out scene
that was polished clean, 
with spit from a dry mouth.

You smooth yourself thin
by breathing in,
the mirror above the mantle piece
watches your mouth hold a smile
but reflections won't let it be happy, ii think you should cut this line, it's explanatory 
it falls back too quickly
to anxious.

You'll be alright ?
you ask like a statement
and I sigh and draw out a yes
so you think I will be. Ii can see this like a movie scene

Later when the door light
slices the two dark halves
of my bedroom,
you'll whisper loudly
he's asleep
and the second stair tread
will creak twice
as you touch my hair. Are you a husband in this with a child?

In the morning
we'll pour quiet milk on bland cereal,
you'll carry your mothers guilt
while I try to sew fresh flowers
back on to your dressing gown. quiet seems to be the emphasis here

At supper time
you'll say we're alright
but it's really a question ii love this line in relation to the previous statement question
and I'll sigh and draw out a yes
so you'll think I don't care. 

I think I can relate, I encourage my wife to go out, she resents me a bit of I do.  Some of this could be good in short form, but it's fine with the changing scenes.