08-10-2022, 07:18 AM
Very nice, evocative in simple ways.
Author's known dislike for titles: addressed by making it an integral part of the first line. Clever.
Equally clever, the progression from broken night (broken by daybreak) to more regular rhythm and prevailing end-rhyme - the day harmonizes and much, if not all, is in order.
Good on you, keeping the cat in (at night). I thought I had neighbors' cats, but it turned out to be (volunteer) rabbits. The thumping! They, and the toads.
Author's known dislike for titles: addressed by making it an integral part of the first line. Clever.
Equally clever, the progression from broken night (broken by daybreak) to more regular rhythm and prevailing end-rhyme - the day harmonizes and much, if not all, is in order.
Good on you, keeping the cat in (at night). I thought I had neighbors' cats, but it turned out to be (volunteer) rabbits. The thumping! They, and the toads.
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