Truant Soul

[brynmawr1]

If you can’t take a joke
don’t get born                   shouldn't 'ave got
unless you’re a bullet proof snail         this line confuses me with "snail".
coz the tattooed lady
won’t come to your aid.

It’s a hard thing
coz chance comes hurtling
from where you were just standing'
and waking up
doesn’t spare you the pain.   won't?

I’m telling you this
coz practice just makes a tool,
like me, a perfect fool.
I’ve been here a while,
I’m not wearing a joker’s smile.   ambivalent about this change.

If incarnation’s your thing
be a marble in the hand
of a ghetto kid where the rainbow ends    maybe period to end this line and remove "coz" to make last two lines one sentence.
coz the moral is always
just the start of a game.      the?

Hi TqB,
Nice job.  Like the rhyme.  Made some suggestions above for you to consider.
take care,
steve