Sea Life (edit 2)

[brynmawr1]

I sit on the Delaware shore as
my toes investigate the sand.  Above,
 
Osprey soar on grey-white speckled wing.
Tucked, they plunge with fierce precision                     
 
piercing the shimmering blue;
reborn they rise, a meal of silver gleam
 
tight in their talon. 
The raptors climb on 
 
amid the shriek and holler
of sandy, tanned children.
 
Salted in surf, they eat till they’ve
had their fill, sustained by every wave.

Forgive me, but I can't help wishing the title was "Shore Lunch." (except that "shore" is already in L1) 
Also, would move "as" down to L2. 
Nice images.

Hi Tiger,
I'm pissed I didn't think of the title myself.  It's perfect.
Take care,
bryn

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I sit on the Delaware shore as
my toes investigate the sand.  Above,
 
Osprey soar on grey-white speckled wing.              with apologies to Semi, I'd add an "and":  "grey and white wings" and does "osprey" need capitalization?
Tucked, they plunge with fierce precision                     I went back and forth on the hyphen.  I think you are right.
 
piercing the shimmering blue;
reborn they rise, a meal of silver gleam        gleams? (and maybe move it to beginning of next line)  From a distance you can only see a gleam of light and I like the sound of it.
 
tight in their talon.            talons?         went back and forth on the "s" here and on wing.  I liked the crisper sound without the "s".  I'll think on it.
The raptors climb on 
 
amid the shriek and holler
of sandy, tanned children.
 
Salted in surf, they eat till they’ve            
had their fill, sustained by every wave.     I read these lines as referring to both the children and the osprey.  If so, maybe something besides "eat".

Interesting juxtaposition of the killing and playing.  Idyllic but not overly so.

Hi TqB,
Thanks for your suggestions.  The eating for the kids was originally "eating life ...." but I took life out and put it in the title. I'll make some edits
Take care,
bryn