Sea Life (edit 2)
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(08-05-2022, 06:37 AM)brynmawr1 Wrote:  I sit on the Delaware shore as
my toes investigate the sand.  Above,
 
Osprey soar on grey-white speckled wing.
Tucked, they plunge with fierce precision                     
 
piercing the shimmering blue;
reborn they rise, a meal of silver gleam
 
tight in their talon. 
The raptors climb on 
 
amid the shriek and holler
of sandy, tanned children.
 
Salted in surf, they eat till they’ve
had their fill, sustained by every wave.
Forgive me, but I can't help wishing the title was "Shore Lunch." (except that "shore" is already in L1) 
Also, would move "as" down to L2. 
Nice images.
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Sea Life (edit 2) - by brynmawr1 - 08-05-2022, 06:37 AM
RE: Sea Life - by Tiger the Lion - 08-05-2022, 07:08 PM
RE: Sea Life - by brynmawr1 - 08-06-2022, 05:10 AM
RE: Sea Life - by TranquillityBase - 08-06-2022, 01:25 AM
RE: Sea Life - by Mark A Becker - 08-10-2022, 04:44 AM
RE: Sea Life - by brynmawr1 - 08-10-2022, 05:41 AM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by busker - 08-11-2022, 09:42 AM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 08-11-2022, 08:15 PM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by busker - 08-11-2022, 09:18 PM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 08-18-2022, 04:40 AM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by Namyh - 01-08-2023, 11:41 AM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by Mark A Becker - 01-26-2023, 01:13 AM
RE: Sea Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 01-26-2023, 03:11 AM



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