Still Life (edit)

Still Life (edit)

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08-02-2022, 01:52 AM

Very much like your revision, and that's a smashing ending.

My only comment is, I trip over:

where all clocks stop
with dangled puppet.

dangled puppets? or is it referring to the narrator?

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Still Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 07-30-2022, 02:04 PM

RE: Time is - by TranquillityBase - 07-31-2022, 03:07 AM

RE: Time is - by brynmawr1 - 08-01-2022, 11:09 AM

RE: Time is - by Semicircle - 07-31-2022, 03:09 AM

RE: Time is - by dukealien - 07-31-2022, 04:18 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by TranquillityBase - 08-02-2022, 01:52 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 08-02-2022, 03:41 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by TranquillityBase - 08-03-2022, 12:39 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by Mark A Becker - 08-02-2022, 01:56 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by brynmawr1 - 08-03-2022, 06:07 AM

RE: Still Life (edit) - by CRNDLSM - 08-13-2022, 10:54 AM

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