07-17-2022, 06:33 AM
(07-09-2022, 10:43 PM)brynmawr1 Wrote:Hey Bryn. I wanted this to be a sort of "he said, she said," and the title was my roundabout way of doing that. The inflection on "she" is just the way I hear it when people say "that's what she said."(07-09-2022, 10:07 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: That's What She SaidHi Tiger,
"The Earth is two-thirds ocean,"
he said.
"No silly,
the Ocean is one-third earth."
I always enjoy your short poems. You get so much into each. Two questions. First, why is "she" italicized in the title? Are you going for a 1/3, 2/3 look with the spacing?
Take care,
bryn
As for the spacing, I wasn't really going for a 1/3 and 2/3 so much as I wanted the words to appear as islands on an ocean of white space.
I was actually doing research for a larger poem and this was a sort of byproduct. I think the employment of white space is too seldom exploited in poetry. When it's done right it can get the reader to breathe in time with the writer.
Thanks for asking,
Paul
