Bus stop

[Savvi]

Cracked road
blurs into mirage 


Yellow field,
herds of bulky shadow should shadow be plural ?
migrate to sea


Glass box,
Sunlight streams
through its film

Well tailored man
sits patiently
for a days work
to begin

Ok so we are at a bus stop, S1 nice image I can see the heat wave over the tarmac, S2 whilst a clever image of fields of rape seed poss ?, again depicting summer heat yet seems juxt apposed to migration when the weather turns colder ? S3 back in the bus stop IMHO this is quite weak but I like the detail of the film ( could be peeling film ). Whilst solid images throughout I wanted the poem to go somewhere to have more of a significance than just a snap shot, I kind of felt like I was left waiting for the bus, of course that may have been your intention. Savvi