Semi

[Savvi]

No more
than empty–
emptiness pulsates the center star ......Makes me think of a black hole

Hand in hand silence,
silent dreams .....nice soft image 

Frozen cotton
to the void– ......void links well with silence



Romance
and pessimism,

hand in hand;

emptiness pulsates
the center star I like how you use this to turn the poem into a different direction

I understand this to be a comparison between the feelings around lost love and romance to the emptiness of a collapsing dead star, its brevity doesn't give the reader too many bread crumbs to follow but I enjoyed the read, on a personal note I prefer some elements of the original. Savvi